Next Right Moves

The main feedback I've gotten was to decrease the amount of background in the essay and increase the actual criteria and why certain elements of the TV series were good or not good.  Honestly, my partner wasn't of any real critical help because they liked most every part of it.  I have been reading reviews on Entertainment Weekly, both about the series I am reviewing and about other cartoons they've reviewed.  It has really helped me hone in on the criteria and the language they use in the review.  Writing a review that is interesting and touches on criteria discreetly is a difficult task, which I have not even come close to perfecting.  I have been adding more varied and creative language to the essay to make it more precise and interesting to the reader.  I've also been taking out the more general statements about the series to keep it from sounding generalized.  I have been having trouble with coming up with specific examples about the series and then integrating them into the paper in a well written way.  That is the thing I've been having the most trouble on.  But I think just reading the paper over and focusing closely on one criteria at a time has really helped me.